Recherche d'Emploi : Critique d'une Lettre de Motivation

Hello, friends. I posted an announcement on the community section of the YouTube channel to say, send me your cover letters. Send me your cover letters and then I'll analyze them in public. Where did the idea come from? The idea is that of the people who have booked me recently, I've had quite a few people with whom I've spent time analyzing their CVs and cover letters. And I've seen that there's a lot of work to be done. So today I'm going to talk to you about a letter that I received earlier. And then I'm going to give you a little bit of the feeling, the feeling that comes out. And the goal is just to improve, you know, the goal is not to criticize this person whom I salute for their courage in daring to send me the letter. If you want, you can send me your letters either by email, aldosteron111mail.com or to the phone number I always give on WhatsApp. You send me the letter. You can remove your name, address, all that if you wish. The slightly personal details, I don't need them, but I especially need the body of the letter. So first of all, this letter that I received has one advantage. It's short, which is good. I almost want to say that it's too short. You always have to limit it. I've seen cover letters that are 11 pages long and no one is going to read them. A cover letter is not meant to get you hired. It's not meant to tell you about your life. It's meant to make an impact, to draw people to your application, to draw them to your strong points very quickly. It's like an advert when you're watching a film and a 30 second advert comes on. This isn't a 1h30 ad. The guy doing the ad, you'd think he was really frustrated because there were other things he wanted to talk about, except he only had 30 seconds. So it's the same for the COVID letter. You can always write an 11 page cover letter for yourself. That way you have elements, you develop them, but then you have to reduce those 11 pages to a few paragraphs that fit on a single page. Because if you see a letter that's that long, I guarantee you that no one will read it and your message will lack impact. So let's start with this letter and I'll tell you a little bit about the feeling it gives to the recruiter. Don't. The letter isn't written for you. The letter is a sales tool. You're selling a Service. What is the service? The service is your job. And what is the recruiter? He's not really a recruiter. He's a client. So the letter is a sales tool. That's how you have to see it. We'll see if this letter sells or not. So, Sir. Madam. I'm currently looking for a job. Your offer caught my attention. Why not? But I feel like this introduction lacks strength. I'm currently looking for a job. Your offer caught my attention. And you're putting yourself in the position of a job seeker. So I don't like this position at the outset. I'm a job seeker. That's because if we start with the position of a job seeker, we immediately put ourselves in a position of inferiority and we can consciously or unconsciously convey the message that we're in the process of getting a job. In fact, I think that's what might come out later in the letter. Having started my professional life in the sales sector, I am now looking to move closer to the administrative field that I enjoy. And that suits me better there. I already have a reservation. I already have a reservation. We will read on and see if this reservation is confirmed. Working alongside you as part of the proposed fixed term contract would allow me to meet your temporary needs while sharpening my administrative skills. Rather, reservation. Reservation. In order to reduce the. Okay, I I. This doesn't work at all. This. This aspect. In the long term, I really thank the person who sent me this letter. But I don't think this letter is recruiting. I don't think it's a recruiting letter. It's a letter that will actually put off most recruitments. Why? Let me tell you something. I am a client. I am a recruiter. I am a recruiter. What does that mean? That means that as a recruiter, it doesn't mean that I have money and I'm offering work to people. That's not what a recruiter is. It's not someone who has a box of money and wants to offer work to people. No, that's not what they are. It's someone who has a problem. It's someone who has something to solve who is ready to pay for that problem to be solved. This letter is not saying that. This letter, for the time being, I want to say the word is a bit strong, but I don't have a better word. But we'll understand each other. It's a selfish letter. You know, the word is strong, but it doesn't matter. We'll use it anyway. Why? It's a letter. And that's why I told you a lot of caveats. This is a letter in which the person applying for the job is saying why the job suits them. I'll give you an example. Let's imagine a letter. Madam, sir, I'm writing to apply for the job you just posted on LinkedIn. I'm interested in the job because it pays extremely well, because it's very close to my home, because it offers opportunities for advancement that match my personal and professional aspirations and so on. What have I been doing all this time? I'm saying what I want from the job, but I'm not saying what I offer. You see? And that's exactly what we're going to see here. I'm looking to get closer to the administrative field that I enjoy and that suits me better. Okay? I'm looking to get closer to that field. Working alongside you on the proposed fixed term contract would allow me to meet your temporary needs while sharpening my administrative skills. I'm here to improve my administrative skills in order to reduce the commercial aspect of my resume in the long term. So I'm coming to you because, as you know, my resume is more of a commercial nature. I'd like to reduce that aspect in the long term. I'd like my resume to be more administrative than commercial. I'm not going to hide it. So by working for you, I'm going to reduce that. So we agree, my friends, that when we look for a job, we. We also look for it for selfish reasons. We look for it for strategic reasons. Yes, it's true. I want to look for this job because it allows me to change, to change my profile, to redesign my resume. Yes. To earn more money. Yes. To be closer to home. Yes, it's true. But these are not things that I'm going to throw out about being motivated and even less so in an interview. I'm going to position myself, or put myself in the position of someone who offers a service, someone who comes to solve a problem, instead of someone who comes to solve their own problems. And there's something else I don't really like about certain letters or even certain wording during interviews while sharpening my administrative skills. When someone says that, just that word, that sentence, it can be a deal breaker. Why? Because if we're looking for someone to do administration in our offices, we're not a university, we're not a school. I'm going to say it bluntly. If you want to sharpen your administrative skills, you won't be here. You're going to learn administration at a school. Or somewhere else with another company, or volunteer or figure it out yourself. When you're hired, you come and work here. You know what I mean? That's what I see. You're going to get excited there. I. I'm saying it bluntly, of course. We put it under the microscope so that things get across, so that the message gets across. But we understand each other. And it's not just administrative skills, it's all skills. It's relatively bearable for someone to say, I'm here and I'm here to learn. No, you're not here to learn. You're here to work. You're here to deliver value. You're not here to learn. So, yes, it's good that you're learning. It's good that you're someone who wants to learn more and everything that's good, that's the icing on the cake. But don't put it too much forward. Don't come to us saying, I, I'm going to learn. That's not how it works. People, companies are looking for people who can already deliver value, not people who are supervised. Unless you're an intern, you're looking for an internship, you're looking for a work study program, all that. That's something else. But if you're looking for a job, you have to show the value you bring. But this letter up to this point doesn't show value. That value is missing from the let's. My autonomy, my rigor, my seriousness, and my attention to detail allow me to organize myself in my daily life, in the tasks assigned to me, and to deliver the work on time, in a timely manner and with quality. That's vague. That's a vague paragraph. It's a paragraph, let's say. Well, it's a testimony about myself. I am autonomous. I am rigorous. All that you show that. It's not even that you show it. It's not something you're necessarily going to say. It's something you're going to exude. It's something you're going to show through all your communication with the company when you come. We'll see when they talk to you, when they interact with you. We'll see if you're someone who's rigorous. We'll see if you're someone who's organized. We'll see if you're detail oriented in the way you communicate with people. But you're not going to say, hello, I'm thorough. Uh, hello. I'm serious. We'll see right away if you're someone who's Serious or not. You see, you. You don't need to say I'm serious and all that. That doesn't make sense. And that kind of thing will create run of the mill paragraphs, will create a run of the mill paragraph that's there to fill things in, but won't really advance the cause. My experiences in business have also given me the patience, diplomacy and understanding that are necessary in general and when needed, always another run of the mill sentence. His experiences in business. What experience in business? I mean, try to be as precise as possible. For example, yes, here we are in a CV of a person who wants to change direction, who wants to change career paths, someone who was in sales, who wants to move into administration. It's very hard to change direction, and it requires cover letters that are much more detailed than this, much more motivated, and with much more arguments. Do you see what I mean? Whereas this letter here will not serve this design as I am describing or formulating it. So my experiences in sales have given me the patience, diplomacy and understanding that are necessary in general and when needed. We are not talking in general terms in a cover letter. We are talking in specific terms. We are not talking about the general, we are talking about the specific. Why? Because we are responding to an offer. To an offer. This offer has a description, a purpose, and we have to show ourselves that our proposal, our value proposition, as we would say in English. Well, our proposal to us fits into the framework of this work and that in a specific way. We have read the advertisement, we have understood it, and we are able to respond to the constituent elements of this advertisement, not something in general and all that. If my application has caught your attention. Insecurity. If my application. Never say if my application has caught your attention, I would be delighted to speak with you during a possible interview to share my real motivation with you. And I like that, because. To share my real motivation with you. It means that in reality, somewhere, the person who wrote the letter felt that their real motivation is not coming across in this letter. That it is not felt. Indeed. Yes, indeed. You are right. Your motivation is not apparent from this letter. In the meantime, please accept, madam sir, my sincere greetings. Okay, so friends, there you have it. We criticized this letter. We criticized this letter. And I would like to tell you that it is a letter that will let you down. Don't write similar letters. Don't write letters in the same spirit here. We are not going to focus on the specifics of this letter. We are focusing on the spirit. Don't convey this kind of spirit in your letters because that is where we will end up with people who say I sent 300 requests and no one answered me. You can send this letter 1000 times and no one will answer you given the lateness in it. Thank you to the person who sent it. If you want me to make a video about yours, feel free to send me your letter. We will do the cvs. We will do the CVS another time. There's a lot to say and eat and drink about resumes and then we meet again when we meet again.